Nyteblade: Deacon Chalk Book 1 (working title) SNIPPET……


I just got done revising this section and thought I would share the snippet.

You aren’t getting a backstory though. Muwa ha ha. I will say that no one in this snippet is a vampire. There are vampires in the book, but not in this snippet, no matter how it reads.

Hope you enjoy it, feel free to comment.

His head lashed side to side. Eyes wild and teeth clenched, he said. “I do not drink from the vein anymore. My sins are great enough without that. I will wait for blood until I can get it somewhere else.” Sweat ran down his face and arms. “I will not die.”

“You are needed tonight to fight Appollonia. You must have your strength.” She pulled her hair to the side, sweeping it off of her neck. Holding up her hand, one thin finger extended and morphed into a razor sharp, needle of talon. Delicately she pushed the edge of the talon into the vein on her neck.

The blood was bright and crimson on her pale flesh as it welled up. The rich iron smell of it filled the inside of the car, mixing with the cigarette smoke. Unbuckling her seatbelt, she crawled into his lap. He didn’t fight as she placed her open vein beside his face. Teeth sank into his lower lip and his head shied away from her, pressing deeply into the leather of the seat behind him. Nostrils flaring, he began to tremble.

“Drink from me.” Her finger was normal again as she wiped blood from her neck. “You talk of sin. I was made to sin against you, let me atone for that now. Lycanthrope blood is powerful to vampires.” Even in the dim light of the Comet’s interior, her fingers smeared scarlet across his lips. “Let my blood heal you.”

His tongue darted out, drawing some of the blood from his lips into his mouth. Eyes closed he savored it for a moment. Tears streamed from down his cheeks as his mouth opened wide. Slowly his canines slid out into fangs. Charlotte’s face was calm as she waited for him to drink. Sweetly, his arms wrapped around her and drawing her against him.

Father Mulchahey turned back to face the windshield, pulling another cigarette from the pack.

I turned up the music to cover the wet sounds from the backseat and drove on into the night.

There you go. Again, feel free to comment.

James

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224 Comments

  1. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)
    Intriguing, but the back story would help.
    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  2. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  3. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  4. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  5. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  6. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  7. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  8. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)
    Intriguing, but the back story would help.
    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  9. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  10. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  11. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  12. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  13. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  14. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  15. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  16. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  17. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  18. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  19. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  20. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  21. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  22. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  23. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  24. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  25. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  26. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  27. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)

    Intriguing, but the back story would help.

    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  28. It feels a bit rough grammar wise but I can’t put my finger on why.(mostly because I suck at grammar)
    Intriguing, but the back story would help.
    Just out of curiosity why is the lycanthrope girl seducing the vampire to drink from her? What type of Lycanthrope is she? It might help cement the seduction in peoples heads. Lycanthropes in peoples subconscious being less passive and more aggressive.

  29. Hmmmm.
    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)
    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).
    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.
    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  30. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  31. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  32. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  33. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  34. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  35. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  36. Hmmmm.
    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)
    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).
    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.
    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  37. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  38. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  39. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  40. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  41. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  42. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  43. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  44. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  45. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  46. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  47. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  48. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  49. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  50. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  51. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  52. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  53. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  54. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  55. Hmmmm.

    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)

    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).

    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.

    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  56. Hmmmm.
    It’s not really a seduction scene. Hmmm, it’s interesting that it read that way to you. (Of course, I understand there is no backstory for you to pull from for impressions)
    Let’s see, Charlotte (lycanthrope) is a were-spider. The character in the backseat with her is not a vampire. (sorry, no further detail, that is a HUGE plot point).
    This snippet takes place directly before the final confrontation with the Big Bad, so her aggression stems from urgency.
    There is no time to dick around when there is a howling pack of vampires on your trail. lol.

  57. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.
    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  58. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  59. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  60. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  61. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  62. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  63. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  64. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.
    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  65. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  66. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  67. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  68. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  69. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  70. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  71. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  72. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  73. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  74. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  75. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  76. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  77. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  78. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  79. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  80. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  81. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  82. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  83. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.

    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  84. Seduction scene read like that becuase of the body language she was doing. Women pulling hair away from their neck, running fingers down their neck, settling into someones lap.
    Ummm all cues that they like the guy and would like to ummmm do stuff.

  85. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…
    Well anyway, that was great!

  86. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  87. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  88. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  89. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  90. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  91. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  92. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…
    Well anyway, that was great!

  93. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  94. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  95. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  96. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  97. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  98. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  99. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  100. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  101. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  102. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  103. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  104. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  105. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  106. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  107. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  108. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  109. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  110. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  111. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…

    Well anyway, that was great!

  112. Hey, that was great. I really liked it. No vampires eh? Well then what exactly is he…? lol. That’s got me scrathing my head… no vampires… Hmmmm…
    Well anyway, that was great!

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